I agree that the first ad seems to have a stronger argument than the second. The conclusion could definitely benefit from a little work, maybe tying the arguments of the two ads together? I didn't really notice much of a problem with the flow of the essay as a whole, maybe one or two sentences. In the beginning of the paper, I think your first two paragraphs would work better as one longer introductory paragraph. Your thesis statement is well thought out and gives a good look into your arguments, and I think you did very well in the descriptions of your ads.
I agree that the first ad seems to have a stronger argument than the second. The conclusion could definitely benefit from a little work, maybe tying the arguments of the two ads together? I didn't really notice much of a problem with the flow of the essay as a whole, maybe one or two sentences. In the beginning of the paper, I think your first two paragraphs would work better as one longer introductory paragraph. Your thesis statement is well thought out and gives a good look into your arguments, and I think you did very well in the descriptions of your ads.
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