Student paper 2
1. The issue is information technology and if it's use is beneficial or not. The importance is explained during the introduction paragraph through the student talking about how information technology has become so prevelant in today's sociey.
2. Four perspectives are clear. The viewpoints are defined by the student as: "university
professors and school officials, parents of students and young adults using
these technologies, the students and young people themselves, and the makers,
marketers, and producers of such gadgets." The thesis information is informative and concise.
professors and school officials, parents of students and young adults using
these technologies, the students and young people themselves, and the makers,
marketers, and producers of such gadgets." The thesis information is informative and concise.
3. The intro does have a good lead into the essay. It captures the reader's attention and prepares them for the information that is in the paper. The conclusion is an effective lead out of the essay because points are wrapped up, the student shares their opinion on the subject, and it is ended with a quote that leaves the audience thinking.
4. Altogether, this essay is an effective essay. It is imformative while keeping my focus and it discusses in detail four different views on the subject. Advice I would give to the reader is to cut out some of the unneeded info that makes some paragraphs a little wordy.
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